sorry an other poem
Posted 07-22-2009 at 08:18 PM by Finna
Since I began this journey long
Questing for your spirit strong
Discovery of just who you are
Heart a blazing shining star
A simple thought occurs to me
As your great depth I slowly see
No person that I’ve ever known
Has as much as you have shown
Even I with Spirit vast
Am swallowed by your shadow cast
I have naught to judge you from
Cept starry sky or morning sun
All that you reveal to me
Causes me to surely see
That you are far beyond my realm
I deeply trust you at our helm
So when I underestimate
Your skill or heart or spirit great
It’s not because you don’t stand tall
But next to you, I am so small
And this is hard for me to say
Cause by your side I want to stay
I’m deeply humbled by who you are
You’ll always be my shining star
Questing for your spirit strong
Discovery of just who you are
Heart a blazing shining star
A simple thought occurs to me
As your great depth I slowly see
No person that I’ve ever known
Has as much as you have shown
Even I with Spirit vast
Am swallowed by your shadow cast
I have naught to judge you from
Cept starry sky or morning sun
All that you reveal to me
Causes me to surely see
That you are far beyond my realm
I deeply trust you at our helm
So when I underestimate
Your skill or heart or spirit great
It’s not because you don’t stand tall
But next to you, I am so small
And this is hard for me to say
Cause by your side I want to stay
I’m deeply humbled by who you are
You’ll always be my shining star
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Sounds like you deeply care for someone. Pretty good poem, imagery, word choice, and rhyme that makes sense. You should probably put ur writing out on a writing site, WritersCafe.org | The Online Community For Writers is a good site with lots of poetry, any you'll get reviews too.
Keep writing and nice job.Posted 07-22-2009 at 10:33 PM by joon360
- Hey Finna*finally get a chance to read some of your work*ive heard great things about you through JK....very nice work of art*Posted 07-23-2009 at 02:44 AM by
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