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poem help

Posted 11-19-2009 at 01:51 PM by genkuro
Updated 03-23-2010 at 07:14 PM by genkuro
Tags poem, poems

This is my story poem that I am writing, but i am stuck on ho to move on. I have a ending in mind but do not know how to bridge the gap. Any help and comments would be helpful.
The people in this poem are mine own. The story is my own. None of this story has been copied.


Natasha

the demon in me is free
there nothing left of the real me

ive given in to my fate
to hope is my mistake

tears of blood run down my face
the darkest hell is my embraces

i cast my wings aside
the demon Natasha has arrived

Ah Satan

my wings fall off and burn away
my horn come out ive went astray

my pure black soul is nice to see
hells worst demons bow down to me

i cause pain and fear to all who love
i see despair in the ones above

the angelic blood fills the air
fallen wings every where

i see what mine past darken eyes
i pity you Natasha's flys

Natasha's Note

the light in my eyes has filled with blood
lost of hope i have won

fear is now what i control
the darken soul will take is toll

power and greed are in my hand
to take the soul of ever man

my finest day will come to soon
the purest of hearts i will consume

Mai

feathers and blood fall from the sky
Mia looks up and wonder why

she look in horror at what Natasha has done
wondering if light can return to the falling one

she hold her hands and begins to pray
hoping to light this darken day

a single cloud forms in the air
one drop of hope they hear her pray

Natasha & Mai

the cloud of hope catches Natasha eye
the light one let out a excruciating cry

he fly down with despair in heart
Mai is the only one to keep the apart

she gazes into the darken soul
her purest spirit begins to fold

the feeling in her heart start to change
Natasha smile a puppet obtained


Mai Descent

the evil flows into the holy heart
dreams and fate are torn apart

bliss and happiness turn to pain
a cleansed mind no longer obtained

the fallen lady begins to rise
the sky darken and starts to cry

she cast off her wing and dawns her horns
she glares at Natasha a new world it born


Mai's Note

i tasted evil and i am pleased
im the one to bring man to there knees

what fools you were to believe in me
your cause is lost when will you see

your heart will blacken and rot away
Natasha has let me come out and play

you stand before the purest of pain
i will corrupt your soul your life is my game

Natasha Weaken
Natasha see his lady in waiting
how her light is no long sustaining

the once pure love in her eyes
has wither away as angels cry

the pain in his soul begins to crack
pieces of feather return to his back

he become loss in dread for what has done
how could he have done this was he the one

Natasha & Mai Pt. 2

Natasha goes to his fallen love
try to heal the one from above

as Mai feels what he has to give
she pushes him away in evil she lives

she cast her dream and faith aside
Natasha plead for her good to abide

she love her power the darkness has brought
forgetting the way the lightness has taught

Natasha see his cause is at a lost
he will have her back at any given cost

Mai's Repentance

Mai turn to end this fight
to end it all this fallen night

she reaches deep into her heart
hatred pain ones damning spark

what she finds was lost to all
the sky light up and tears start to fall

she meets Natasha with a warm embraces
renewed hope on both there face

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  1. Old Comment
    Depends on what you'd like to end it with.
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    Posted 11-19-2009 at 02:03 PM by jumbojer jumbojer is offline
  2. Old Comment
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    Quote:
    Originally Posted by jumbojer View Comment
    Depends on what you'd like to end it with.
    Well can you tell me how you think it should end?
    I would hate to give away the ending.
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    Posted 11-19-2009 at 02:06 PM by genkuro genkuro is offline
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    Well I don't really have an opinion. More of a branch in my head for lines it could follow.

    Out of Natasha's view:
    -Could turn to darkness as well, together in darkness
    -Could turn to darkness, Mai sees the light, apart again
    -Could kill Mai, to prove his love
    -Could hug Mai, to prove his love
    -Could kill himself, Mai's darkness takes over
    -Could kill himself, Mai turns to light

    And many more, that's why I said, it all depends on the ending sentence.
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    Posted 11-19-2009 at 03:51 PM by jumbojer jumbojer is offline
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