Prologue (I have no name for the book yet)
Prologue
I took one step closer to the being that had appeared before me seconds ago. I was scared but i had been waiting for this my whole life, I was ready for it, the moment were I would become useful to my village. Nothing could scare me now, I took another step and I felt the warmth of the light that the winged being emitted. My mind was rushing with the possibilities I had to tame that so feared mythical creature. I was closer to it than my comrades, the possibilities to escape if it attacked were few, and knowing it was stronger than me scared me, I wasn’t willing to lose any more souls for my mistakes. Rog was there looking at me, he trusted me and I couldn’t fail, I drew my sword and charged at the Spirit that would save my world.I'll post the first chapter when i'm done with it. (ty whewt 4 the corrections)
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I like it. It sounds cool. =]Posted 09-22-2008 at 12:42 AM by Karbear411
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Do you want comments on storyline, or grammatical stuff?Posted 09-22-2008 at 12:43 AM by Whewt22 -
both... whatever u like really...Posted 09-22-2008 at 12:47 AM by susa_24 - Well it sounds really good so far, props.
Just fix where, to were, and put a period after "ago" and "village".
Its not needed, but it helps.Posted 09-22-2008 at 12:54 AM by Whewt22 - kk ..... tyvm!Posted 09-22-2008 at 12:54 AM by susa_24
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sounds interesting i wouldnt mind reading thisPosted 09-22-2008 at 05:01 AM by sonobidragon
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