Scroll 1: The Happy Birthday (part 2)
There was no handle, just two huge wooden doors, I started looking at the carved drawings and tried reading the strange language, from what I could see there were at least 9 different languages, all unknown to me, but then I found a phrase I could read, it was in my village's ancient language, it said:
"She who possesses the power of the goddess will find the way in".
Did I possess the power of the goddess? I was sure I did not, my powers were normal, I had grown that way, normal, and besides, how would I go in if there was no handle in the doors?
I tried to find more phrases I could read and I found another one, it was the oldest language ever known, the world's language, I had studied it a lot because my mother insisted I did, I found it pointless because that language was extinct, but my mother made me do it, and I'm grateful for it, it read:
"She who has the eyes of the beast will see the way in". I did not have the eyes of a beast, which beast anyways?
-I seriously need to stop asking myself questions I cant answer- I thought.
My father smiled and kept looking at me, it almost looked like he was fascinated. I tried concentrating on my eyes, I looked at everything, I was determined to see the entrance, I had to see the entrance, I needed to see the entrance, I closed my eyes very tight and when I opened them I could have died of a heart attack if it weren’t for my anxiety to know what was waiting for me, I could see everything darker, everything was black, I was blind, I had lost my vision, how on earth did I manage that?
I realized I kept asking questions so I tried to see something and slowly I realized not everything was black, I tried looking at my father but I couldn’t see him, but that didn’t matter, he was there and wouldn’t leave me alone never, I looked at the now purple door and I saw something new, there were light spots in the door, light was coming out of the door, I felt attracted to it and tried to touch it, but when I touched it, it disappeared and the door made a sound, I knew what I had to do, I touched another light spot and the same thing happened, it would open if I touched all of them, so I did.
There was no light left, so I figured I needed to push the door open, but I needed my father to keep going, I was scared now, the adrenalin of the knowledge had disappeared and now I realized I had changed my vision Youdi -the goddess of the planet- knows how, I had seen everything black besides a purple door that had lights on it and I could not see my father.
I felt alone, I wanted to see everything normally, I was desperate, I couldn’t hold back the tears, I hated crying so much, my skin was always cold but my tears were warm so crying hurt, one tear peeped out of my eye and stream down to my cheek, burning it, it kept going down until it got to the jaw, where it dropped down in what I call a suicidal attempt and hit the ground, another one did the same, I was really trying not to cry, I didn’t cry a lot, and when I cried I stopped because of the pain, but now the sadness was stronger than my stubbornness, so I let go, I sat down and let the tears crawl down, I needed a cry big time, I wonder what my father was doing at that moment.
I closed my eyes in an attempt to cage the tears inside my eyes but they overflowed and kept crawling down, I started sobbing, I didn’t want to sob, I had never sobbed, I think this was the first time I cried for so long, I was trying to calm myself down but there was nothing that could comfort me, I decided to try and go back to the village, or try to hug my father, I stood up and wiped the tears away, when I opened my eyes I was surprised again, I could see everything normally, I was relieved.
I had come so far, I needed to keep going, I knew I was being stupid but I am that way, so I pushed the door open.
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"She who possesses the power of the goddess will find the way in".
Did I possess the power of the goddess? I was sure I did not, my powers were normal, I had grown that way, normal, and besides, how would I go in if there was no handle in the doors?
I tried to find more phrases I could read and I found another one, it was the oldest language ever known, the world's language, I had studied it a lot because my mother insisted I did, I found it pointless because that language was extinct, but my mother made me do it, and I'm grateful for it, it read:
"She who has the eyes of the beast will see the way in". I did not have the eyes of a beast, which beast anyways?
-I seriously need to stop asking myself questions I cant answer- I thought.
My father smiled and kept looking at me, it almost looked like he was fascinated. I tried concentrating on my eyes, I looked at everything, I was determined to see the entrance, I had to see the entrance, I needed to see the entrance, I closed my eyes very tight and when I opened them I could have died of a heart attack if it weren’t for my anxiety to know what was waiting for me, I could see everything darker, everything was black, I was blind, I had lost my vision, how on earth did I manage that?
I realized I kept asking questions so I tried to see something and slowly I realized not everything was black, I tried looking at my father but I couldn’t see him, but that didn’t matter, he was there and wouldn’t leave me alone never, I looked at the now purple door and I saw something new, there were light spots in the door, light was coming out of the door, I felt attracted to it and tried to touch it, but when I touched it, it disappeared and the door made a sound, I knew what I had to do, I touched another light spot and the same thing happened, it would open if I touched all of them, so I did.
There was no light left, so I figured I needed to push the door open, but I needed my father to keep going, I was scared now, the adrenalin of the knowledge had disappeared and now I realized I had changed my vision Youdi -the goddess of the planet- knows how, I had seen everything black besides a purple door that had lights on it and I could not see my father.
I felt alone, I wanted to see everything normally, I was desperate, I couldn’t hold back the tears, I hated crying so much, my skin was always cold but my tears were warm so crying hurt, one tear peeped out of my eye and stream down to my cheek, burning it, it kept going down until it got to the jaw, where it dropped down in what I call a suicidal attempt and hit the ground, another one did the same, I was really trying not to cry, I didn’t cry a lot, and when I cried I stopped because of the pain, but now the sadness was stronger than my stubbornness, so I let go, I sat down and let the tears crawl down, I needed a cry big time, I wonder what my father was doing at that moment.
I closed my eyes in an attempt to cage the tears inside my eyes but they overflowed and kept crawling down, I started sobbing, I didn’t want to sob, I had never sobbed, I think this was the first time I cried for so long, I was trying to calm myself down but there was nothing that could comfort me, I decided to try and go back to the village, or try to hug my father, I stood up and wiped the tears away, when I opened my eyes I was surprised again, I could see everything normally, I was relieved.
I had come so far, I needed to keep going, I knew I was being stupid but I am that way, so I pushed the door open.
Tell me if u like it... and rate it from 1-10 plz!!
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....aaaah its over? i want to read more.... 9/10
great job susa
Posted 09-22-2008 at 01:05 AM by pistachio20
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lol ty! and yah its over cuz next scroll has a LOT of explaining and i kinda skipped that part and continued with the other so if i post the part i have it would be 2 complicated....Posted 09-22-2008 at 01:07 AM by susa_24 - Take your time, if you rush it won't be as great as it should be from someone with your talent
Posted 09-22-2008 at 01:12 AM by pistachio20 - lol ty chio! i think my self esteem boosted a little...Posted 09-22-2008 at 01:13 AM by susa_24
- I give praise where praise is duePosted 09-22-2008 at 01:16 AM by pistachio20
- ty chio Posted 09-22-2008 at 01:20 AM by susa_24
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i give it a 9/10 good story keep up the good workPosted 09-22-2008 at 05:13 AM by sonobidragon -
wow susa this is really good, i love the description u've used, gd job! ^-^Posted 09-22-2008 at 04:04 PM by animefan_001 - wow ty guys! lol working very much on the second scroll...Posted 09-22-2008 at 11:45 PM by susa_24
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omg susa this is the best!!!! 9/10!!!Posted 09-27-2008 at 10:07 AM by DarkAngle -
incredible. i love it. 10/10.Posted 03-03-2010 at 12:46 AM by Lord Revan
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