Trapped with in me.
Sitting looking into the darkening sky,
I close my eyes and wish I could fly.
To be lifted away to better days,
I am alone fighting though life little maze.
Forced to don a happy face,
only wishing to leave the damning place.
The sky is filled with broken dreams,
my heart is filled with painful screams.
Sick of wiping tears from my face,
why must I live on in this barren place?
Alone in this life I know so well,
Forever caught in this living hell.
I close my eyes and wish I could fly.
To be lifted away to better days,
I am alone fighting though life little maze.
Forced to don a happy face,
only wishing to leave the damning place.
The sky is filled with broken dreams,
my heart is filled with painful screams.
Sick of wiping tears from my face,
why must I live on in this barren place?
Alone in this life I know so well,
Forever caught in this living hell.
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REALLY good, would make a VERY good song.Posted 11-01-2009 at 06:18 AM by kashshaptu
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Thank you, I don't really write much so I am happy to hear people think it's alright.Posted 11-01-2009 at 06:25 AM by twix -
its good
Posted 11-01-2009 at 06:42 AM by vi3t_93 - i like itPosted 11-01-2009 at 06:52 AM by foxuzamaki
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can i have permission to turn this into a song?something like 80's heavy metalPosted 11-01-2009 at 06:56 AM by Tony_walther - why its that good?Quote:Originally Posted by Tony_walther
can i have permission to turn this into a song?something like 80's heavy metalPosted 11-01-2009 at 06:58 AM by twix -
I love it baby! It makes me think of a girl sitting in an open field looking up at a rainy sky.
^.^Posted 11-01-2009 at 07:00 AM by Tsuki ni - Thank you love. Wow I might have to put some of my other ones up....Quote:Originally Posted by 月に舞う魔人 Tsuki ni I love it baby! It makes me think of a girl sitting in an open field looking up at a rainy sky.
^.^Posted 11-01-2009 at 07:02 AM by twix - hellz yeah. i mean i'd have to add a chorus line to it but can I?Posted 11-01-2009 at 07:06 AM by Tony_walther
- Just let me see it when you are done and give me some form of credit.Quote:Originally Posted by Tony_walther hellz yeah. i mean i'd have to add a chorus line to it but can I?Posted 11-01-2009 at 07:09 AM by twix
- definately,i'll add it to a list of songs we plan to put on our first cd if it comes out good enough. is so you'll have all the creadits as the lyricistPosted 11-01-2009 at 07:10 AM by Tony_walther
- Cools I never thought I was any good.Posted 11-01-2009 at 07:21 AM by twix
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omg nice!! ^_^ i likeee ^_^ haha i wanna buy the CD too!Posted 11-01-2009 at 07:22 AM by DarkAngle - Yachi@well i'll try to keep it the same as much as possible.ofc the rhythm and melody,plus putting it into an 80's heavy metal format will make me have to change somethings about it. but i'll give you final creative oversight on it
darkangle@give me an address to ship it to and i'll try to get you onePosted 11-01-2009 at 07:31 AM by Tony_walther - cools let me know I can try to write more for it if need be.Quote:Originally Posted by Tony_walther Yachi@well i'll try to keep it the same as much as possible.ofc the rhythm and melody,plus putting it into an 80's heavy metal format will make me have to change somethings about it. but i'll give you final creative oversight on it
darkangle@give me an address to ship it to and i'll try to get you onePosted 11-01-2009 at 07:33 AM by twix - trust me..it need be!! my guys arent exactly great songwriters.but i want so much meaning in the songs i write that it takes me a while to think of them then write em down. so yes plz. but would e-mail them to me??Posted 11-01-2009 at 07:39 AM by Tony_walther
- yeah PM me you email and i will make one for you(the one I use know is for personal stuffQuote:Originally Posted by Tony_walther trust me..it need be!! my guys arent exactly great songwriters.but i want so much meaning in the songs i write that it takes me a while to think of them then write em down. so yes plz. but would e-mail them to me??Posted 11-01-2009 at 07:58 AM by twix
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we got a new shakespearePosted 11-01-2009 at 10:49 AM by TheLoot -
nice poemPosted 11-06-2009 at 05:51 PM by Dany1908
