ma chaos rise to divinity

[thegodoflight]

this is the first paragraph of my story, it is only 1 paragraph per chapter.



The story starts out in 196a.d. with ma chao in the northern territories of china. Wondering about the rebels, and why he is not going to war. Just a year before, the yellow bandits attacked the Han capital of Beijing . Although ma chaos father ma teng didn’t fight against xioxun the yellow bandits leader. ma chao secretly wanted to fight against them, but ma chaos father didn’t want to because he feared that the other warlords would try to attack him afterwards if his army was crippled during battle. so ma teng decided to not enter the conflict. Know it is 206a.d. and ma chao is now a noble, and arrogant person, at age 26. Then in the spring of 206a.d. there is a shadow arising, and it is one from a far away land.

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[Raos]

good but too short you should figure out more for you're next chappy.Also capitalize the name of characters and places.

[thegodoflight]

During this time Ma Chao is vary bored because of the fact that he didn’t get to fight at all during the yellow bandit war which lasted until the spring of this year. It is now fall, and the gardens at his castle in the Xing providence couldn’t be more peaceful. But that is only in the north in which Ma Chao lives with his father Ma Teng, the Xing providence also is where ma chaos mother is buried after her death at the hands of a mysterious force called elite vicious army(Eva) ma chaos mother whose original name was unknown to every body but the mysterious leader of Eva. though Ma Tengs father gave her the nick name beautiful princess , because she was from the central plains, in which ma teng rescued her, from the tyrant dong Zhou. Dong Zhou tried to wipe out her whole entire village just 5 years before ma chao was born. They immediately got married in about 1 and a half months. Then in 3 and a half years ma chao was born, into ma tengs family, this is the past. But this is just the peaceful times there was always war in the central area of china, and Ma Chao was getting restless. But little did he know that soon he would get to go into battle, and lead china in a war just to have the Chinese people be ruled by Chinese rulers. Let alone by more than one ruler.


Then in the fall of 207 A.D. the battle of hu lao gate. dong Zhou was being attacked by the alled warlords from all around the land. The allied commander was a mysterious figure. When the colition tok hu lou gate, luo yang a fire brook out in whitch most of the city occupants were killed, including all of the imperial people, like the emporer, and his personol assistants, the person who started the fire was dressed in vary weird clothing and had a snake with him.




here is the next part of my story, the next part will be out tomarow around 6 o'clock

[thegodoflight]

these ar the updates for to day this also marks the end of chapter 1, probuly tonight, i will put 1-3 more paragraphs, these are vary important paragraphs enloy, and please leave comment once you read this i want to know how it sounds, and if you want me to do anything which includes more talking, bigger font, and there will be action it just will be comeing up later



Then 3 months after Lou yang was burned to the ground their was a meting composed of various people from around the world they were talking on what they should do next. One of the members said” we should get rid of all opposition in the known world”. but other members thought that they should leave the east out of it, then after 5 days of talking and arguing the reached a conclusion on what they should with the east particularly the Mongolians, and the Chinese. The person who hade decided on what to do was the vary same on who burned Lou yang to the ground, and the person was non other than the king of demons Oda Nobunaga , Daimyo ruler of Japan, and at his side were orochi the serpent king , and the leader of Eva, Francisco manta. Then the meetings were done for a while then Nobunaga orochi and manta went to edo to tell the emporer of Japan what the discussed at the meeting.

Mean while Ma Teng and Ma Chao were on there way back to their providence of Xing Ma Teng had a bad feeling on what was going to happen, and said to Ma Chao “we should hurry back I have a bad feeling about what’s going to happen in the coming months” Ma Chao said “I also think so our solders are vary tired that was a tough battle against that tratoris scum Dong Zhou I think we should try to find out what happened to Dong Zhou and the rest of his army” . Ma Teng said in return “yes that would be a wise decision and in return I think that he should have to give up custody of the emperor, also do you know what happened in Lou yang?” Ma Chao said in return “I think he was killed in that terrible fire accident, it was truly horribly thing I wish we cold have stopped it.” Ma Chao then said “I think we should rest for tonight.” then Ma Teng reluctantly agreed with him and shouted out a vary loud “WE ARE GONNA REST FOR THE NIGHT!”

[Raos]

It's alright you're getting better a Daimyo would only lead a portion of Japan if Nobunaga was to be second only to the emperor of Japan either Shogun or Prime Minister or Chancellor would be better ranks you also said meting instead of meeting.

Doing good so far keep it up.

[thegodoflight]

today i will not update my story i got into a fight at school and i was coughing up blood on the way home, and i dont feel vary good, so sorry, it might be out on friday

[thegodoflight]

ok here is another section of the story i will update more later, ive had this done for a long time


Mean while dong Zhou was awaiting execution by Tao Tao, lu bu was at the city of he Ji with diaochan then when lu bu was practicing. a snake appeared out of nowhere, and challenged him to a fight one on one. This snake was actually orochi. When they started orochi strike lu bu with his scythe lu bu fought back with sky scorcher each one was parrying each other, but then orochi cut lu bu’s eye out, but then lu bu cut orochies arm off, so it was a even fight. Mean while orochies colleagues were out working them self there plan was goanna be the most vicious one ever nobnunaga had the privilege of taking out Tao Tao. He did this by sneaking up with his elite samurai then in seconds all of wei was decimated, and so the united nations plan was to commence. After Tao Tao was dead Francisco manta had a double mission he was after two separate targets. Mean while orochi and lu bu’s battle now was reaching the eight minute mark, then orochi said “it is time to end this”, then orochi summoned a anaconda that stole lu bu’s sky scorcher then orochi cut lu bu’s body to dust.



Thus the Han empire then submitted to orochi and his colleagues. Diao Chan was also was given to Eva. As a courtesy not to attack any more Han court officials, and the Han capital which was moved to change du. since luo yang was burned to the ground.

meanwhile diao Chan was being forced to become like the Koreans. slaves to nobunaga. She had no will to fight back, because her only love was dead, and she was never going to see him again. She also was praying that one god might help her go back to china, and to lu bu’s resting place at hu Lou gate. The united nations also completely suppressed all of the Han empires military, all of its warlords, were dead except for the really minor ones, all of the three kingdoms rulers were assignated each a different way. The only people to survive in shu was reong zhoung a student of the sleeping dragon. every other officer in shu couldn’t be found and was reported dead.

[Lord Duckie]

it is a little hard to follow, try adding more details, and describing everything more.

[123456789554332]

sucks, ma chao is a retard, and also not accurate.

[Raos]

Originally Posted by 123456789554332

sucks, ma chao is a retard, and also not accurate.

hahahahaha