lol I know what you mean, but thats why I said its raw, only edited once

well... it was... a mix and match of different feeling.
I had sometimes the feeling some of the description was in "extra" or you have a "active" sentence that finish with a description, which is harder on the reader.
Also, there some time i can feel you try to use different words (like i remember the words "aoustic" on the first page took me off guard lol) but at others place... you use the word "noticed" 2 or 3 times on the same line o_O;

I think that you had part where you was more thinking and part where you had more of a "carried away" type of writing.

It's the way the writter feel but it's also important to have a certain ... hmm how can you say this ... like it have to be the same so it's easier on the writer..

it's so hard to explain ><

ah so what did you think of it from the analytical point of view

Also yep no story is

to be honnest, i first read it on a very ... hmmm analyse point of view XD then I realised "Hey Lia! stop trying to be "professionnal" and read it for real!" so I did read it for fun after and I REALLY enjoyed it lol

Our style are very similar so I understand perfectly how you write =P
I enjoy it alot lol i know it's not for everyone tho =P

Ah I see, so how do you like it

Also you might really like the one entitles Echo as the fantasy one is a bit raw, but both are actually

Most have been the fantasy one about the elf?

Oh so which one did you read then, the fantasyt one or the othe one

I don't think so actually o_O;
But i was planning on checking them out later ~
Maybe print them and read them while the code is compiling at work ~

Well have you read all three blogs?

I knew it =P
We wouldnt get along that well whitout that =P

You have to hurry to write more ~ i want to read more of what you do!