Rap sheet #1

[Keita]

Aigh, this thread's for any seasoned rapper or somebody who just started off, like me, to show off they're original lyrics. Hope there lotsa emcees watching anime out there. Imma go first, i wrote this piece yesterday night, hope you like it, please feel free to leave any comments of praise or criticism:


Aigh Check it,
Witness my witness yu witness witness my fitness n riches
You can hate me completely
oh yea, despise me real deeply
But stand in my way and i put chu ina-
Creepy condition, no explination no faking
Im up-taking my mission
Try ta invision the crimson
Im the- illest and realest
No bawling or hustling but bustling and bustng yur skull like it nothing
causing sever concoction and something like,
Amnesia with a seizer n fever that's gotcha shaking like a beaver
Now who's the best and who's realer?
Who's tha- instinct driven killer?
Causing such tremors of terror, no era bttr for heather
Finish you with the quickness diminished
So now your soul is being lifted
You died cuz yu werent so much gifted
The sky for your passage has shifted
Just leave it to those who prolific
N can thrust up any given district
I combust cos i am terrific

[ALdsTaR]

Not bad dude :O I like it

[FireclawX]

i didn't understand the overall meaning but cool rhymes bro :P