Rule Breaker: Character inDev

[shibuya]

Character Development + story development

INFO:

Rule Breaker is supposed to be a story, V/N I'm making to house the characters you see below. The main character is Shinita Yukai and His Sister Ami Yukai.

PLOT:

Shinita or Nita for short is caught up in an accident that happened 7 years prior to when the story happens that warps him, and several hundred people into an alternate universe. Upon being in this new world, the alternate universe is actually inhabited by beings called ghasts, ghasts are like white blood cells of their universe, they attack anything that is contaminated with their world, and therefore the hundreds or so people that arrived at their world were slaughtered.

As for the very Young Shinita, he manages to survive, with a handful of others and takes refuge from the ghasts. Certain events happen which leads to Shinita gaining a power beyond imagination, these powers exist only within this universe.

However, due to a second experiment that happens in the real world, 7 years later, the alternate universe is merged with the real world and the survivors can return home, but along with them come the ghasts which slip through timespace into the real world.

Shinita also has the trouble of warding off capture, many want his ability for many different reasons.

The Characters

Shinita Yukai

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Shinita's Nihil Sword Strike

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Suza Anne

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Others In Dev

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Ami Yukai
Chisato Natsume

Concept

[Rokyoku]

Interesting story.
Does the plot start with the second experiment as the first one (the accident) is a prologue/history of sorts? Or do you plan on starting earlier leading into the second experiment? For example following the events how the main protagonist gets his special powers.

Probably the alternative universe is not all hostile since the main troupe finds some kind of refuge and manage to survive for 7 years... I'd also like to see you do a scetch on one of the ghasts.

I've always been fascinated about alternative realities and other such entities.
I hope you'll manage to make good progress with this. Also the idea of having to fight on two fronts sounds nice. It will make a hectic and kind of like paranoidic atmosphere.

Good luck with the story .

[shibuya]

I will do more explaining once I'm done with a handful of characters thats for ur opinion xD